Amidst the stench and suffocation
Surrounded by Darkness
I see something crawling
Creeping and screeching
Bleeding copiously
Amidst the oceanic depth
Surrounded by slime
I see something wriggling
Slippery and
greasy
Coughing horrendously
Amidst the turbulence
and ignorance
Embed in ambiguity
I felt my soul weeping
Tormenting and
racking
Hustling profusely!!
~07/11/2013~
Wow. You went deep and made use of lots of images that caused me to shudder. Thank you. xoA
ReplyDeleteI am glad you liked it . Thanks for your appreciation.
DeleteThis is very intense, thank you for sharing and participating with us at Poets on the Page.
ReplyDelete"I felt my soul weeping" I know this feeling.
I loved your OctPro challenge . Though I did not participated but i did read few writes. Thanks for letting us explore more and more.
DeleteFun wordplay in this piece. Though the subject matter was rough the way you structured the words made it easier to read. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for your kind appreciation.
Deletevery nice! loved the imagery :)
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DeleteWow! You've packed so much into such a brief poem. May your soul find Life.
ReplyDeleteThnx for yr wishes
DeleteThis one is among one of the best pieces of yours ! When your soul weeps remember there is always another soul standing with you
ReplyDeleteHmm Power Of Souls
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