Wandering on the minds premises
Premises hold some golden secrets
Secrets are double locked
Locked thoughts are impatient
Impatient to see the shining light
Light shining bright
Bright are the feelings
Feelings clear as crystal
Crystal reflects the frame of mind
Mind finally rests …stops its wandering.
~09/10/2020~
Participating in OctPoWriMo 2020 with word Prompts Thoughts, Feelings, Heartfelt, Practical.
Poetry format is Loop Poetry is a poetry form created by Hellon. There are no restrictions on the number of stanzas nor on the syllable count for each line. In each stanza, the last word of the first line becomes the first word of line two, last word of line 2 becomes the first word of line 3, last word of line 3 becomes the first word of line 4. This is followed for each stanza. The rhyme scheme is abcb.
Love these lines -
ReplyDeleteFeelings clear as crystal
Crystal reflects the frame of mind
Beautifully expressed; when our thoughts come to light our mind finally rests, crystal clear.
Thank you Nithya for liking
DeleteLovely poem Deepti. As Nithya says the lines
Delete"Feelings clear as crystal
Crystal reflects the frame of mind"
perfectly expressing that moment of clarity
Thank you!
I fear my mind never rests, but it is somewhat less restless than it used to be.
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Such a wise observation, "Premises hold some golden secrets
ReplyDeleteSecrets are double locked".
Thanks Victoria 🙏
DeleteLovely, Deepti. These lines struck me:
ReplyDelete"Locked thoughts are impatient
Impatient to see the shining light"
Thank you.
xoA
Lovely! Locked thoughts are indeed impatient, and cause restlessness. It's good to let them flow.
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